He was very very happy, contended and at peace. He spent most of his time clinging to his mother, safely under her shadows, never venturing away from her sight even for a moment. He thought it was only bliss until one day.
He could never forget that unfortunate day in his life when he had to be separated from his parents and siblings. He was angry. He asked "Why me?" But he had no answer. He was jealous of his sibling who would remain with his parents while he would never ever see them again. His parents convinced that it was for his good. The person whom he would be going with had promised them that he would provide the child a better life than the one he had. But he did have a wonderful life right now, isn't it? But what he didn't understand was his parents were struggling to meed their ends meet. They did not want their children to struggle, so they took this tough decision to send this child away so that he could get a better life.
Mom and dad were heart-broken to give away their son, the only consolation was that the gentleman promised their kid a better life, whereas the kid thought his parents forsook him. He was young enough to even know what it meant to be forsaken.
Soon, he was shifted to a new place, from there he was taken to one more home. He got a luxurious room all for himself, he was very happy. He soon forgot his parents and started enjoying his new life. Life was once again fun, no one disturbed him. He had lot of friends who were of his age. They seemed very happy, life went on.
One day, he was taken away and in a jiffy broken and poured to be fried into a pan.
PS : Thank you Neha for prompting me to write on this :-)
hahahahaha..very well executed..loved it :D
ReplyDeleteVery good. Nice narration. Love it.
ReplyDeleteHahahha... lol... :D After seeing the pic of that egg, and the experience I had over that dog story you'd written some time ago, I kinda guessed it. :P :P
ReplyDeleteNevertheless, it was fun reading. ;)
Thanks Neha :-)
ReplyDeleteThanks SG glad you liked it
ReplyDeleteKarthik!!
ReplyDelete:-( That picture is not of an egg, its a baby!!
Anyways, I know people now predict an otherwise end as I write anti-climax. This is the end, no more anti-climax.
But thanks, glad you enjoyed reading it
lolzzzz loved the twist :D
ReplyDeletepoor egg :D
lolzzzz loved the twist :D
ReplyDeletepoor egg :D
while writing down a funny story
ReplyDeleteyou have written the story of thousands of young Indian kids who are lost .
great post.
It should have been:
ReplyDelete"He was too young to even know what it meant to be forsaken."
Well, to be honest almost the same set of reservations as for the earlier dog-story. The buildup was really, really good, and it could have been built into a very touching story. :)
And going by the build up of the current story, I very sincerely feel you should try to write a fuller story. If it is the time constraint, I would still urge you to give it a try. But if it is only some kind of hesitation as to whether you would be able to do it justice or not, then rest assured, you will improve with subsequent attempts even if your first attempt does not turn out successful.
Would like your comment on a really short story I had written - vacillation (click).
TC.
And well, I don't know if there is a less whacky way of putting it, but the purported child except for the facial features is looking like a silk worm larva (whatever that is)! :P
ReplyDeletelolzzzz loved the twist :D
ReplyDeletepoor egg :D
Lol... :D Dhuhh! dumb me! It looked like one of those artistic eggs.. :P
ReplyDeleteSmart egg to write so about an egg.:)
ReplyDeletelol GOOD ONE !
ReplyDeleteFrying pan ! I guess he must be happy that he didnt end up on the corrupt politicians face !
Rajlakshmi,
ReplyDeleteThank you. I am glad you liked it and couldn't predict :-D
Hi sm,
ReplyDeleteYes, you observed it. While writing this, even thought its to be taken in a humorous way, my thoughts were how so many kids in India fall victim to such child abduction and other unpleasant things.
Thank you fro bringing in the inner meaning.
Majak majak mein hi katl kar diya...:)
ReplyDeletecheck out my blog.You have been convicted for this.
Keep smiling.
Ketan,
ReplyDeleteThanks Ketan. I want to make a confession here. When I wrote this piece, I wasnt happy with it. Was it my language, grammar, sentence construction, I don't know. For the first time, I gave it to a friend of mine for proof-reading.
So I guess there are other minor grammatical sentence construction errors than you pointed out. Hmm, its my work, lack of time and urgency. But yes, I cant give such lame excuses. Thanks for correcting me. I appreciate it.
Talking about the story, I am glad you liked the build up. I dont want an emotional or a touching ending ever. It would affect e personally. Thats why I shun away such endings.
I will surely try writing a full-fledged story. :-)
I will surely read your story by end of day and pass on my comments.
Hehehehehe, some other reader commented that the photo looked like an egg, and you are saying it looks like a larvae. So yeah, the feature is definitely different. I chose that picture as the baby is wrapped in a cloth and its like an EGG
Karthik,
ReplyDelete:-D The picture is yeah, bit different. I put it up because it closely resembled an egg.
I have a serious question. Did he/she became an omlette or scrambled egg? I would like to know the ending even if it is painful. So that I can put an end to my anxiety.
ReplyDeleteHoly Lama,
ReplyDeleteThank you for that egg-y comment :-D
Kavi!!!
ReplyDeleteYou think uniquely, dont you. Hahahahaha. That was too good. Yes yes!! the egg would have been relieved that he didnt get smashed on a politician's face :D
Makk,
ReplyDelete:-D Kya karen. Katl hona hi tha :-P
Rushing to your blog right away!!
Dear Insignia,
ReplyDeleteNice picture. Kartik says, it is like an egg and Ketan says it is like a silk worm larva. But I would say this a baby who is enjoying outside world as if he is in his mother's womb very safe, peaceful and protective.
The narration given by you is part of life of every parent and child. No parent wants their children to struggle and their aim is that their children could get a better life when compared to them. It is nature.
Once the child is settled, forgetting parents etc., happens in few cases and may not be in all cases. Even if it happens, parents should not bother much about this.
There is a quote in Telugu "Rekkalu raagaane pakshi yegiri pothundhi" means Birds will fly away once the wings are fully grown. So, parents responsibiltiy is only upto this stage.
Every one should be positive in this.
All the Best of luck.
wow..I never could guess till the end:)
ReplyDeleteOh I thought the story was about a child who was seperated from his parents and then suddenly he forgets them and when he meets them after several years forgets them and some such senti story...tune toh mera popat kar diya :)
ReplyDeletebut having said that...I would confess that this was a very well narrated story. Well done!
Very well-written:):) You have once again brought up a lovely topic (scary one) and one that happens in our midst unfortunately:-(
ReplyDeleteBut I found the 'egg' comment so funny I'm laughing hard!!!!!!! Hahahahahaaaaaa..
Hi naidu sir,
ReplyDeleteThank you, your interpretation is really touching. Yes, what you say happens with most people and life goes on, we need to take it positively.
Samvedna,
ReplyDelete:-D Glad you couldn't guess the end. It means I did my job well
Hi Gayathri,
ReplyDeleteLol!! Me and sentimental story!!! :-D
I am glad you liked it. :-)
When the end is unpredictable, you really get a chuckle out of that
lost world,
ReplyDeleteYes, the situation is so common. But I wanted it to be humorous and not sentimental. Thats why personified the egg. :-D
To be honest I am not sure if its funny or thought provoking.. but interesting yeah..
ReplyDeleteThinking again about this, if it was not for that future, there are fairly good chances he wouldn't have been born in first place.. poultry is an industry.. no? :)
Nice one!! well written.
ReplyDeleteScattered Thoughts,
ReplyDeleteIts both actually :-)
Hahahaha, yes is poultry the only thing.
As one reader commented, it was better for him to get fried in a pan than get smashed on a politician's face :-)
Thanks kish :-)
ReplyDeleteHahaha! Good one.. I liked it :).
ReplyDeleteA different end tho'.
ReplyDeleteSG,
ReplyDeleteHe became an omelette.
Hi Priya,
ReplyDeleteWelcome to B Log. Thanks for your comments and keep visiting.
Hi Harini,
ReplyDeleteWelcome to B Log. Glad you liked it :-)
And please keep visiting.
Thanks for your reply my guru Insignacharya. I was waiting with bated breath for your reply. Now I know the final outcome I am at peace. May that young baby egg rest in peace.
ReplyDeleteYou are welcome SG and yes, May peace be with the baby egg
ReplyDeletebread aamlet..pwns these all..
ReplyDeleteah.. I think that would have been a better ending.. smashed on a politician's face.. at least it would have served some purpose.. :))
ReplyDeletesoin,
ReplyDeletePerfect comfort food yeah!! :-D
Hi Scattered thoughts,
ReplyDeleteIt definitely would have served purpose but I guess the egg wouldnt have liked it :-P
You kept me tensed till the climax. Had no clue what was about to unfold... Poor thing. Why is it so tasty? ha ha!
ReplyDeleteOh man! My dad's comment really touched the soft spot of my heart... wow! I gotta call him now...
ReplyDeleteGautam,
ReplyDeleteGood, i did decent job. Poor thing!! Hahahahaha why is it so tasty!! Hmm...it has to be tasty after all the ordeal it goes through.
Your dad's comment was touching. Did ya call him?
Sherlock Holmes ehh!!
ReplyDeleteCool work..:)
Loved it.
Cheers
Nuts
P.s. What an egg!!
Nipun,
ReplyDeleteNo where close to Holmes :-D
Thanks, glad you liked it.
Hahahaha, what an EGG!!!
Very well written. I was wondering what was it all about. You win!!
ReplyDeleteChitra,
ReplyDeleteThank you. :-) If couldnt make it out till the end, then I did my job well. :-)
hehehe.. nice twist.. It took my tubelight brain a while to figure out how cud a KID be cracked and then fried up :D
ReplyDeletethank you smita. I am glad you liked it. Yeah, the KID is an EGG :-D
ReplyDeleteAwesome post!! I have never been able to understand poem but this was pretty sharp.....Good to see that I can feel them sometime...Thanks for this post.
ReplyDeleteHey thanks Pratik. I am glad you liked the piece :-)
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